I'm glad you recognized it! The turkey version is what I heard in my head every time they mentioned "Mandy" on the show. Except now I wander around singing the "Oh Jasmine" version, too. Or both at once.
Terrific Faith voice, and some beautiful grace notes throughout.
Thanks for all your comments. A lot of the lines you picked out were my favorites. And I'm glad you liked the voice; that was the part I was most unsure of (doing poeticky things with Faith is . . . problematic, imo).
I think it could use a beta -- some of the passages are repetitive, and there are sections that could be edited out to make it stronger.
I agree. I did plan on waiting to post this for a long time yet, beta'ed and everything, but I kinda . . . got fed up with it, and then got all angsty because today was . . . well, today. I still plan on working with it and touching it up, and either getting my regular beta or someone else who's interested to chop it up for me. Thanks for pointing that out and for all your lovely fb.
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I'm glad you recognized it! The turkey version is what I heard in my head every time they mentioned "Mandy" on the show. Except now I wander around singing the "Oh Jasmine" version, too. Or both at once.
Terrific Faith voice, and some beautiful grace notes throughout.
Thanks for all your comments. A lot of the lines you picked out were my favorites. And I'm glad you liked the voice; that was the part I was most unsure of (doing poeticky things with Faith is . . . problematic, imo).
I think it could use a beta -- some of the passages are repetitive, and there are sections that could be edited out to make it stronger.
I agree. I did plan on waiting to post this for a long time yet, beta'ed and everything, but I kinda . . . got fed up with it, and then got all angsty because today was . . . well, today. I still plan on working with it and touching it up, and either getting my regular beta or someone else who's interested to chop it up for me. Thanks for pointing that out and for all your lovely fb.