caught me right at the beginning with that totally unexpected direct address (though it's possibly more of an assault) to the reader. It's pretty unusual for a character to turn around and start cussing you out before you even get into the story,

Yeah, I was afraid it might turn people off. It was the first part of the story I wrote, and I felt like telling it: ok! I won't write you if you really don't want me to! ;o)

The whole lapsed Catholic bonding was very poignant, I especially loved Faith's reflection about her mother and her own name. But even more I loved the moment when she noticed angel still moving a rosary that wasn't there

So glad you liked those parts. I really like to talk about religion, but a lot of people don't, so I was wondering if it would strike anyone as preachy. The majority of people who were brought up Catholic that I've met, however, view Catholicism as a very defining part of their lives, and I found it interesting that both Angel and Faith were most likely from Catholic (and Irish!) backgrounds.

My one crit, and other people have mentioned it, is that at times I felt the voice got a little too poetic and drew me out of the Faith persona. It really is only a minor thing, but maybe something you could look at.

Yeah, I'm definitely going to do some more touching up. Thanks for pointing that out!

I friended you btw. I hope that's okay.

Of course it is, and I'm about to friend you back. Thanks again for all your insightful comments.