Gorgeous. Their thoughts feel very natural to me: yeah, that's how it would be. And I'm fanning myself, even though it was nothing like a sex scene. Good writing is sexy.

I've now read Confessional, too, btw, and I've been trying to figure out how to respond. It's an amazing, provoking piece, but so far it's reduced me to an uncharacteristic, "Dude. Buh! Wowsers."