I agree with Sera's comments above. I felt there was a lot of exposition, and it didn't read like the normal TKP-quality. The concept was interesting, but the execution felt rushed. I love fics that explore the lengths Angel will go to protect the people he loves, but his actions here seem pretty cavalier, and I didn't really buy it. Yes, he's done this kind of mind-fuck twice, but both times it was to save someone he loves from dying. I don't buy that he'd do it just to spare them the pain and suffering of living. I mean, who loves suffering more than Angel? He'd probably consider it good for the soul. *g* I could have bought it, but it needed a lot more work to get me there.

I see what you mean now about your SSS post yesterday. It feels like this piece was written all in one sitting, without a lot of revisions. Sometimes that can work really well, and other times what you throw on paper needs some editing. I think this is one of the latter. :)

Sorry if this is too harsh. *slinks off*