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It's Lion Turtles all the way down ([personal profile] lettered) wrote2006-04-06 12:31 pm

Let's talk about word choice.

Once upon a time there was a wank on it, but for the life of me I can't remember what the life threatening issues were (it might've been something about tentacles and Hermione), or I'd link it for your snorting things up your nose pleasure (within was the link to THE most HI-larious bad!fic I have EVER read). But wanks come around about every 7 months, 4 days, and 3.2 hours, so don't worry your noggins, kids; you'll be seeing it soon enough. Anyway, we are only concerned with the end result, which was really nothing like the following, but it's how most wanks end up looking to me, so here you go:

Person With Anime Name A: *mocks* The words you use are too big for your fics!
Person With Clever Apathetic Phrase For Name B: You just aren't smart enough to read me! [*is emo*]
FANDOM_WANK: Person With Anime Name A's wee!vocabulary! *mockety-mock*
FANDOM_WANK: Shitmanfuck, Person A's one of ours!
Person A: Yes, the words Person B uses sound too intellectual for the average intellect of her fic, mock her, mock her!
FANDOM_WANK: Wait, we're mocking people who use big words now?
FANDOM_WANK: OMG, WHAT ARE WE MOCKING? LET'S GET IT STRAIGHT, PEOPLE!
FANDOM_WANK: Or not. *mock mock mocking*, which occasionally ends in smocking, after which we all end up with cute little pinafores.

[Transcriber's Note: was that a place for emo? Did I get it right?]

So anyway the wank is not the point; the point isn't even those crazy kids at F_W, nor even their smocking needles.

The point is word choice. I felt like poking Person A with a firm needle of repartee (© Jane Eyre omg!), but I actually knew what Person A meant. Every once in a while I'll be reading a fic and I'll stumble onto a word--a word that isn't necessarily uncommon, but a word that makes me say, "Oh. I just know Author had her thesaurus out for this one," and not in a "what a way to flex your vocab" way, but in a "that was completely unnecessary; she should've used a simpler word" way. That is, the word, which wouldn't've caused me to bat an eyelash in a more sophisticated piece, draws attention like a sore thumb because the rest of the piece (conceptually, structurally, grammatically, whatever) doesn't quite...live up to the occasional bursts of elevated vocabulary.

I think it happens a lot with new writers and especially young writers and also bad writers. Some people with a smaller vocabulary might be deciding to spice up their piece with a couple of words they either a) don't know, b) understand but aren't familiar with how to use, c) rarely hear or see. The result might be a relatively even tone, voice, style of the piece, until you get to those particular words. Again, they might not be particularly complex or unusual words, just words that stand out as a little more...advanced than the rest.

But I use the thesaurus ALL THE TIME, and not just when I can't think of a word...I use it when I want to find a word with a certain flavor, and sometimes the word I choose is also "more advanced" than the word I would've chosen on my own. Also, I freely admit that I am one of those writers who has a small vocabulary and tries to spice up her writing with a thesaurus and words I might not normally use in ordinary conversation. In one fic I actually used words that I did not know (something I'd never done before. I looked them up in the dictionary and then googled around to see how they were used in various sentences before I used them, but before that, I had had no clue what the words meant).

The thing is, I think it's possible to use a word you didn't know before, or hadn't used before, or have rarely see, and not have it feel out of place, not have it break the style, tone, voice etc. What I really want to ask is, "how does one achieve this?" But I really already have my answer: I read and weigh and experiment and pick the word that feels right to me. Sometimes it's the common word I came up with right off the bat; sometimes it's the word in the thesaurus I might know but wouldn't have lighted on in weeks of thinking, sometimes it's even a word I'm a little uncertain of and have to go double-check the meaning of before I use it (and that one time, it was words I didn't know at all!)

But what I'm interested in is the attitudes towards this. Do you use a thesaurus, how much, do you like using it, does it feel like cheating, do you only use it because you can't *think* of a word, or do you use it because you have a word you could use but it just doesn't have the right flavor? Do you ever hold off on using the thesaurus because you feel it might stilt your speech? Do you use a thesaurus on purpose to stilt your speech? Do you use words you're uncertain of, or don't know? Do you ever pull back from using a word because you feel it's something whoever's reading might not know, even though it's a word is something you feel like you might use in everyday conversation? Have you ever had it happen that someone says, "Whoa, showing off your vocab!" when you used a word you thought was pretty common? Do you ever use a word *expecting* that most won't know what it means?

(When you read fanfic, do you ever come across words you don't know? Do you ever go look them up afterwards?)

All the above was just supposed to be one point under the general idea of "word choice," but I had difficulty expressing myself, sorry. I wish someone very clever would come in after me and boil these big posts down to three neat little four-lined paragraphs, because I'm way too lazy to do it.)

One of the questions I have relates to my last question about research: what about word research? How often do you research just looking for a specific word? I mentioned my plate episode, when I wanted to find another word for "ceramic" to reference what the plate is made of. Do people often go hunting for such specific words? And if you were going to write a fic with say, a big medical problem in it, is learning lots of vocabulary along the way something you do? And would you use the words you learned in the fic, even if most people wouldn't know their meanings?

Also, how concerned are you with word choice? Do you just write whatever comes out of you; do you do that but then go back to replace some words with better words, do you end "settling" when you can't find the exact word you want, how long do you hunt for the proper words?

I'm just interested in how writers approach the words they use. Which when you think about it, is really the most basic thing to writing there is, which is maybe why I have so many questions but am finding it difficult to state my point succinctly. I'd love to hear anyone's and everyone's thoughts on it.

[identity profile] stultiloquentia.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 06:25 am (UTC)(link)
Hi, my name is Stultiloquentia and I am a logomaniac.

Thesausus? I think I use that Firefox plug-in more than Google. I have a pretty big active vocabulary, but I also lose words on the tip of my tongue ALL THE TIME, so off I go because I know there's a good one for audacious that starts with "b" ... brazen! Ha! Ooh, ballsy, bantam, bold, brash, brassy ... temerarious? Cool.

Yes, I used thesausus.com to write this comment. Or, well, actually, I already had the window open because I am presently fussing with a short story about a very audacious young lady.

In my fiction, I choose words for sound as well as interest, but I'm very conscious that the little ones are popular for a reason. Thou shalt not use long words when diminutive ones shall suffice. Much of my editing is weeding -- of whimsical adjectives, flights of alliteration and punning that give me pleasure by themselves, but gum up the story as a whole. Your comment is astute: that stuff has to be earned; you have to make sure your story is strong enough to carry it.

Graceful simplicity is what happens when a writer is experienced enough to be able play the word games, but confident enough to know when to stop.

[identity profile] stultiloquentia.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 06:50 am (UTC)(link)
I don't know when to stop. :P Questions R fun.

Transcriber's Note: was that a place for emo? Did I get it right?
Yup.

Do you ever pull back from using a word because you feel it's something whoever's reading might not know
Heck, no. I presume my audience is smarter than I am.

Do you ever use a word *expecting* that most won't know what it means?
I figured I'd send a few people scampering off to a dictionary when I used "terpsichorean" last fall. But I also figured it was placed well enough in the text that general meaning would be evident, and nobody's read horribly disrupted.

When you read fanfic, do you ever come across words you don't know? Do you ever go look them up afterwards?
Yes, and double yes.

Do you just write whatever comes out of you
Yes, but it won't come out until it's marginally pretty, unless I absolutely force it.

do you do that but then go back to replace some words with better words
I always have to do a run-through to get rid of duplicates. Somebody peers at somebody in one paragraph, and then there they are peering again two paragraphs later. It's really bizarre which words get stuck to my fingers.

do you end "settling" when you can't find the exact word you want, how long do you hunt for the proper words?
Occasionally. There's a nasty duplication in the second-to-last paragraph of my post-NFA Spuffy fluffbit, and I still go back now and then to see if I can solve it. Two years from now I'll snap my fingers and go, "Of course!"

[identity profile] ex-dovil323.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 09:38 am (UTC)(link)
If I go brain dead I'll use the theasaurus on my computer, but only to use a common word because if I start throwing in the multi-sylabel Latin jargon words it's going to sound fake and throw my story off it's axis. My stories tend towards the scratching and burping variety which when someone else actually takes their time and sculpts their stories using words it just makes me adore them even more.

*adores you*

What's another word for "gleaming"?

[identity profile] crazydiamondsue.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 11:38 am (UTC)(link)
I overused the thesaurus in my youth. See youth as college, where nothing was worth writing unless I could work in a word that would make the campus newspaper editor or my World Lit professor arch their eyebrows and whistle "impressive!" through their teeth.

That was about the age I began writing a novel about a southern writer who's forced to go home to face the hometown folks who aren't all that impressed with the way she homaged them in her first literary effort. It contained both the words "chigger" and "lachrymary" in the first few paragraphs. Yeah. That was unnecessary.

I've since misused words in fic (exacerbate comes to mind) that have been caught by quick betas. But I love the word play and flavor of uncommon words, and I thought the Buffyverse had a deft touch with that. Causing Giles to use olfactory was certainly in character, but having Xander make an "old factory" joke about it and then quickly cover with, "He smelled...right?" was brilliant.

I still occasionally turn to www.thesaurus.com. Just the other day I was working on a fic that included bondage - not the sexy kind, the trussed up and held captive variety - and kept looking for other ways to express it because of the kink overtones the word has in fandom. I think I eventually went with hog-tied...

[identity profile] bisi.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 12:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Aren't you being interesting, tkp? I was mulling over your last reply - 'who has emotional dibs?', 'should an author be able to write any pov?' - and here you've posted again. On that last thing, for me there's an awful lot of arguable stuff - maybe I'll mail you when I've got my head round it, eh?

Words, beautiful words, like shiny pebbles in the sun. I do use a thesaurus, because I have a brain full of holes. Therefore I've got the meaning of the word, and maybe the initial letter. I also have the rhythm of the word, the vague shape of the space it occupies, like its footprint, if you like. But I may not have the word itself - it's escaped and is hiding in the bushes. So if I read through a list of words with similar meanings, the one I was after from the beginning may be hiding in amongst them. Often it isn't, but the action of reading is enough to trigger the catch.

It's got to be the right type of thesaurus as well. Not a concise one, and not one that's the size of a concrete block either - I get lost in the lists with those. My favorite at the moment is the new Penguin - ah, I see it calls itself concise - it's what I call a medium-sized thesaurus.

Something about the hypertextual online format just doesn't chime with the way my brain's connected up, so I won't use an online T unless I'm desperate, and even then, they usually won't work for me.

When I'm revising, I hear the sentence as a string in my head. That's how I know if I've got a word wrong: it's the wrong rhythm for the sentence. I like the shape of words. Sounds like I don't choose them critically, doesn't it? I judge for precision of meaning, and then for the sensory feeling of them. It's sort of like oratory, you know, call and response. If you're orating, you stimulate a response from the audience by the sound and the swell of your words. Even in essay writing, which I do quite a bit of, that's what I'm looking for in the way I've got the words arranged on the page. It's like the rhythm and pacing of the words give the reader hints of what their response should be.

I hadn't thought about this at all, so what I've just written is new to me! Damn, but you ask good questions.

Oh, and in revising, I'll work towards clarity, and I don't always allow myself to be as playful as I'd like. Although I kind of got sanction to be playful from a writing workshop I was on recently.

[identity profile] hannasus.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 12:48 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm just going to talk about fiction, because outside of blogging, that's pretty much all I write. I'm less concerned with my own vocabulary or the vocabulary of the piece than I am with the vocabulary of the character I'm writing. I choose words based on whether or not the character would know/use them in a sentence. This applies even if I'm not writing dialogue, because I usually write in third person limited POV, so I'm not only trying to capture their voice in the dialogue, but in the narrative. So whether they would think that word matters just as much as whether they would say it.

I use a thesaurus (actually I mostly use a synonym finder, which is slightly different) constantly, because I'm always on the search for the perfect word. Not necessarily the unusual word or the bigger word, but the word that's just right for that character to use at that moment. And depending on which character I'm dealing with, this can be very challenging. Obviously Fred or Wes or Giles would describe things with different words than Buffy or Xander or Gunn. And Angel, because of his age, would have an even wider vocabulary, that's occasionally the slightest bit old-fashioned sounding.

Because I'm still obsessed with this Firefly fic I'm writing, and because I'm finding it especially challenging to choose the right words, I'll use it as an example. Mal's vocabulary isn't particularly advanced--he hasn't had a lot of schooling--but because the series uses a lot of rustic and archaic words, a lot of his vocabulary is unusual to me. And one of Mal's character traits is that he strings words together in beautiful and creative ways. River's not crazy, she's "whimsical in the brainpan." So I've been spending a lot of quality time with my thesaurus trying to come up with quirky combinations of words with just the right flavor so that anyone reading it would instantly know that it's Mal's voice I'm writing in.

So, yeah, if a word's out of place in your writing, it's out of place. It doesn't matter if it's too "big" or too simple, if it's not the right word, it's going to stick out like sore thumb.

[identity profile] lostakasha.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 12:57 pm (UTC)(link)
Your posts bring me joy, Joy!

Me clings to me thesauruses (thesauri?) like a clinging thing. Using a bound thesaurus helps focus my thoughts, although there are times I like the immediacy of online versions.

I'm an old-school writer, so at any time I have a number of books open on my desk -- style guides, dictionary, more than one thesaurus. It's a comfort zone for me. And I will hunt for the right word until I find it.

Yes, the word has to have the right flavor -- and weight. Can't throw the sentence off balance. It also has to have the right cadence when I hear it in my mind. I'm not so concerned with readers having to rush off to the dictionary to look it up as long as it moves well within the structure of the sentence. Plus the paragraph has to have a underlying rythmn. How successful am I doing that? Hit-or-miss. but that's what I strive for.

But nearly as important to me are works from writers that I love -- I'll pick up books of poetry while I'm writing just to feel certain patterns and words, rediscover usage. I lean on poets more than writers when I'm writing fic. Lately it's been Olga Broummas, Neruda and Lorca. (Yeah, I know. Slash will do that to me!)But does it make it into the fic? Nope. It's just fuel.

That actually happens with 99% of the reasearch I do for a fic. Get as thoroughly inculcated in the subject as I can, given the limits of my intellect and the timeframe, and then leave most of that off the page. I think that's probably very common -- again, old school habits.

And I am a huge fan of using new-to-you words in fic! Yes!! Do this daily! Lather, rinse, repeat with those!

And as for vocab snootery? I'm not afraid of that at all. I once dated someone who mocked me for my "Ten dollar vocabulary." Alas, she could find my g-spot, but that dis put out the fire for me. Gotta have priorities.

I love your posts like whoa.

[identity profile] 43100.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 02:38 pm (UTC)(link)
OMG YOU USED THE © SIGN *squee* & -is proud- lmao o.O

When I first started out writing, I eventually ventured over to the AIM robot SmarterChild who has a built in dictionary and thesaurus. I'm very guilty for using words I do not know and have never seen in really bad fics that they just don't belong in. But I at least looked them up in the dictionary first...

I've taken a break from writing fics etc. because of my total lack of knowledge as far as that goes so I can read up on it. I've bought like fifty books on essays and I've been hanging around some of the more experienced fandom writers on LJ and reading their essays, including this one! I'm guessing the next time I try to write I'll probably be re-reading to see if the word fits although - after using the thesaurus so much - there are few words that I do not know or can't figure out!

I love mixing ingredients then baking up a certain flavor to a story. How it's read and then how it tastes afterwards. I won't be able to reach this point unless I get my writing skills together - which includes the type of words that I use in what I'm writing. I guess how they fit in a story is one more thing I'm going to have to work on. Really, who wants to read the word 'hebetudinous' in a story where the majority of the words have under 12 letters in them? Certainly not me, I tell you.

[identity profile] swmbo.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 02:55 pm (UTC)(link)
Ohhh, neat.

The only time I use a thesaurus is if I'm having a momentary brain freeze of "what is that word that means xyz and starts with a q and" - as a sort of reverse dictionary. I tend to do it more in my work stuff than I do for fic - stopping to look something up would break the flow of my writing and I'm much less likely to brain freeze on a fic, because I am lazy enough that I only write when I am in the zone - sadly at work I have to work EVERY DAY, whatever, work.

Sometimes I'll tweak something after it's done, change a word choice here and there, but it's pretty rare, I tend to go with my gut instinct. I agree that word choices need to be the RIGHT word choice and there often is the perfect word - but it's also usually the word that comes to mind first 90% of the time.

I also, usually, try to tone down the language in my fic - often to less than my natural writing/speaking style - I have a naturally large vocabulary. Because I appreciate accessibility and also because I tend to write in a very tight POV and my choices should reflect my characters.
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[personal profile] rahirah 2006-04-07 03:55 pm (UTC)(link)
Usually I use a thesaurus when A) the word I want is on the tip of my tongue but I just can't get it out--to jog my memoty, IOW. B) When I think to myself, "Jesus Christ, woman, if you use 'snarled' one more time in this story, readerdom at large will rise up and strangle you with your own large intestine. Synonyms, bitch!"

I do end up settling sometimes, though I don't like it. On such occasions I'll often set the piece aside and come back later with a fresh brain. I'm fairly concerned with word choice, though I tend to be more concerned with it on the level of sentence and paragraph than individual words--I mean, I want to get the exact right word, but I'm more concerned with getting the exact right sentence, if that makes any sense. I revise a lot, for word choice, for rhythm, for atmosphere.

[identity profile] amybnnyc.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 04:44 pm (UTC)(link)
I have complex feelings regarding the thesaurus, really, and what it all boils down to is that it's just one tool in a big shed, to be used in conjunction with all the rest of the tools to make something really, really pretty/shiny/well-maintained/what-have-you. It's the thesaurus abuse--that overwhelming feeling of "that word does not mean what you seem to think it means"--that just *kills* me. For the love of monkeys, thesaurus.com and dictionary.com have the same home page--you just have to click a different radio button!!; just take the shiny new word you've picked and give it a quick look-up to make sure it doesn't mean "Colonial-era Indian chief" instead of "bra" (yes, that is sadly a real example--read it in the middle of someone's sex scene, laughed 'til I was sick). I think my big problem with theasaurus use is akin to the problem with spell-check--people tend to get lazy with and because of it.

But as a resource, used properly, the thesaurus is really invaluable, I think. Using it to find a synonym and avoid high degrees of repetition, or to find a word that better suits the tone of your story or the rhythm of your words than the one that first springs to mind, or to just branch out and see if there are better words for what you want to say are all valid uses, and are great--if the use is coupled with the word research so as to avoid big snafus.

As far as word choice goes: for me, it really comes down to being in tune with my style and general way of writing, and the tone I want to set in a particular story; I tend to think that if you have a good-enough handle on where you are and where you're going, it'll be easier to find the words for what you want to say, whether or not those are words that you use everyday or words that you find via another resource. I sometimes have whole passages just appear in my mind out of nowhere, but once they're written, stringing them together and finding the right words that still suit the mood/tone/etc. can be like pulling teeth; that's where the whole nose-to-the-grindstone part takes over, and the thesaurus may make an appearance.

I don't pull back if I feel like I'm using a word that other people won't know; most of the time, I just try to make sure that the context is such that a reader could get the basics of the meaning, if not the full essence, from the way the word's used.

I have gotten the "Whoa! Holy GRE words!" comments in conversation before over words that I didn't think were any big deal, and it kind of weirded me out, to be honest. I don't really think of my vocabulary as all that all-encompassing--I just like words, and learning new ones and how to use them and actually using them. The comments have never really stopped me from talking, though, though they have given me pause, and they generally make me more aware of trying to give more of a context during the rest of that particular conversation.

I hope this makes sense, though I know it's a bit on the rambly, stream-of-consciousness side... day 5 of achy-super tense-neck-migrainey thing is not my friend. Woe. :( Even so, thanks for making me think! :)

(And yep, you used emo correctly. *g*)

[identity profile] anelith.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 05:06 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm peeking in here even though I'm not a writer just to tell you how much I love you for the smocking needles...

Can I also say that I use an online thesaurus to look up words sometimes just because I'm extremely forgetful? There are times when I'm writing comments or posts and I say to myself, "I know there's a word that means something like _________... damn, what was it again?" Senility is creeping up on me.
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[personal profile] my_daroga 2006-04-07 06:30 pm (UTC)(link)
I use the thesaurus (or dictionary) a lot, but I think my vocabulary is pretty large. My reading vocab, that is. I tend to forget words I "know," or lose their use when they're needed. Looking them up refreshes my memory. I wouldn't avoid something that was important just because someone might not understand; but on the other hand I do sometimes get too attached to needlessly heavy words. And I don't tend to do a lot of editing. It's more or less as I go. Sometimes I'll remember what word I really wanted to use, and go back and replace it. Sometimes I'll want to use a word I'm not sure of the meaning for, because of how it sounds or what I *think* it means. In that case, I look it up, and I might think twice about using it if I myself wasn't sure what it meant.

[identity profile] semby.livejournal.com 2006-04-07 08:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Once again with the fun questions posts!

I use the thesaurus all the time. But rarely to use more advanced words not in my regular vocabulary. More often than not: to substitute a word that I feel I've been using a lot, to get a certain "flavor", as you say, or a word that's a "synonym" but has a *slightly* different meaning, or to come up with a word I can't think of. Which is difficult, because normally when I'm struggling for the word I'm looking for, I can't even think of synonyms.

And, not that I'm in any way super-intellectual, but sometimes it's the simpler word that I blank on and the more advanced vocabulary that pops into my head, and on those occasions I'll usually be the one to think "that word sounds too formal in that context" and have to use the thesaurus to remind myself of a word that would sound more natural.

And I do get taken out of a fic when an out-of-place word is used, more so in dialogue than narrative, but I'll usually just pause a moment and then move on, rather than dwelling or complaining about it.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 02:27 am (UTC)(link)
I have a pretty big active vocabulary

Speaking of vocabulary, active, that's a good word. I have at best a decent vocabulary, but what's frustrating to me is the range of it really isn't at my finger-tips. I use what I consider to be a very small range of words in conversation. The thesaurus often seems to be my only access to words I know but for some reason can't call to mind, and rarely use.

Yes, I used thesausus.com to write this comment.

Heh. I used it to write the post.

Your comment is astute: that stuff has to be earned; you have to make sure your story is strong enough to carry it.

Speaking of graceful simplicity, how many jumbled paragraphs did I use to come to that conclusion? ;o)

Graceful simplicity is what happens when a writer is experienced enough to be able play the word games, but confident enough to know when to stop.

Nice way of putting it and yeah, the latter is totally my biggest problem in writing, as you've alluded to in a comment or two on some of my fic.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 02:44 am (UTC)(link)
terpsichorean

Did you know that word before you used it? And dude, I don't even remember seeing it, although I too almost always look up the words I don't know.

Yes, but it won't come out until it's marginally pretty, unless I absolutely force it.

This is interesting to me, because as soon as my pen touches paper, or fingers the keyboard, it all comes tumbling out, pretty or unpretty unlike. It's only when I'm utterly fixated on making every single word perfectly pretty that it doesn't come out like water.

I always have to do a run-through to get rid of duplicates. Somebody peers at somebody in one paragraph, and then there they are peering again two paragraphs later. It's really bizarre which words get stuck to my fingers.

I was thinking about this when I was compiling all the posts I wanted to do about writing, but I didn't know when to bring it up. I guess on this one would've been good! What's most amusing to me is when I see a published author doing this--so obviously stuck on a word, and so obviously not even noticing it. I tend to use "flatly" and "blankly" way too often to modify the word "said." And isn't excessive adverbage a no no? Oh, maybe that's another post.

Two years from now I'll snap my fingers and go, "Of course!"

Ha! That is how I write poetry. I have a poem I have been writing for 7.5 years now.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 02:59 am (UTC)(link)
I'm less concerned with my own vocabulary or the vocabulary of the piece than I am with the vocabulary of the character I'm writing.

Yes, I had planned on mentioning the idea of vocabulary as related to character. Which is a whole 'nother ballpark, imo. In that case, the author isn't worried about word choices as it relates to the audience, and the idea of blending any and every word into an over-all style isn't really so independent from characterization. In first person, or extremely close limited third, word choice IS characterization, whereas in omnicient or much more distant limited third, and sometimes second person, that's not the case.

One reason why I, and I think a lot of writers, really enjoy limited third is you can change that distance--you can write a really close third in which the narrator is speaking just as the character would, and in the same piece you can pull back the camera and speaking in a much more omnicient tone. I've had the problem of wanting to use a word the character I'm writing wouldn't use, and wondering if it will still jerk the reader around if I use it in a section when I'm using a limited third very distant to the character, as a opposed to a section elsewhere in the piece where the third is much closer.

I use a thesaurus (actually I mostly use a synonym finder, which is slightly different)

What is the difference? I have a book that calls itself a synonym dictionary...it's helpful because it describes the nuances in meaning, but there are so many less words to choose from, it's really only helpful when trying to determine the exact difference in meaning of two words.

Mal's vocabulary isn't particularly advanced

One thing I find interesting about all the FF characters is how every once in a while they'll slip in a word that's far more sophisticated than you'd expect them to use...and how well that works, and how humorous it can be. But I sometimes think it's the actors who made that element work, not the writing. When I come across Jayne tossing off a more advanced word in fic I'm less likely to believe it than if it was actually coming out of Baldwin's mouth.

Another thing is, there were sometimes, for me, when even the actors couldn't pull it off and the dialogue just sounded weird and stilted.

River's not crazy, she's "whimsical in the brainpan."

I wish more writers would write her that way!

[identity profile] stultiloquentia.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 03:07 am (UTC)(link)
terpsichorean
Did you know that word before you used it?


Yup, it shows up in a poem by T.S. Eliot or Edward Lear or somebody.

And isn't excessive adverbage a no no?

Hogwash. I've been compiling a Word file called Found Writing Tips, and one of my favourites is from [livejournal.com profile] eliade's commentary track for "Your Horoscope for Today":
I know there's this whole derisive field of criticism against adverbs (and adjectives!) as if the whole world can be boiled down to nouns and verbs. What-*ev*-er. These are clearly the same people who subsist on celery and wheat germ.

I have a poem I have been writing for 7.5 years now.

{g} I have some original stories like that. I've learned to be philosophical: Now is not its time; and yet its time will come!
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 03:10 am (UTC)(link)
Well, your fic often has the feel of kind of tippling from the tippy top of your brain and tumbling down all the way to your feet, saying "D'oh" repeatedly as words bumps into your nose, your chin, your boobs, and your knees. It wouldn't be the same if you stopped to use the word "callipygous" on your way down. Though come to think of it "callipygous" is perfectly suited to many of your themes.

*squishes!*
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 03:11 am (UTC)(link)
Erm, and the above is meant as a most earnest compliment!
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[personal profile] lynnenne 2006-04-08 03:23 am (UTC)(link)
My writing leans toward the spare and simple, so I don't use the thesauras a lot. Sometimes I need it when I have a word on the tip of my tongue, but I just can't remember it. Other times, I know the meaning I want to convey but I don't like the way the word sounds, so I'll look up a synonym that's softer/harder/more lyrical/more gutteral/starts with the letter "s." Rhythm is very important to me, so the way a word sounds makes a big difference.

I recently got into a similar discussion on [livejournal.com profile] virtual_ford on how style choices may or may not affect a reader's perception of the characters.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 03:27 am (UTC)(link)
I overused the thesaurus in my youth. See youth as college, where nothing was worth writing unless I could work in a word that would make the campus newspaper editor or my World Lit professor arch their eyebrows and whistle "impressive!" through their teeth.

See, I'm just not convinced there's such a thing as "overuse" when it comes to a thesaurus so much as misuse. If a writer is using it just so all her words sound fancier or worth of a through the teeth "impressive!", sure, that can make a fic or essay ostentatious or pretentious (who's using a thesaurus NOW? heh). But I use the thesaurus not so much to find the more elevated word as to find the most appropriate word.

That was about the age I began writing a novel about a southern writer who's forced to go home to face the hometown folks who aren't all that impressed with the way she homaged them in her first literary effort. It contained both the words "chigger" and "lachrymary" in the first few paragraphs. Yeah. That was unnecessary.

But it sounds like it could be a great novel if the southern writer eventually realizes that she's actually a pretentious snob, and by the end her words get smaller and smaller--and punchier and punchier, each shorter, simpler phrase filled with more and more meaning.

Yeah, I wanted to do that piece without punctuation. What can I say; I like to juggle geese.

But I love the word play and flavor of uncommon words, and I thought the Buffyverse had a deft touch with that. Causing Giles to use olfactory was certainly in character, but having Xander make an "old factory" joke about it and then quickly cover with, "He smelled...right?" was brilliant.

Oh yeah oh yeah. I loved that about Buffyverse too, and it's so much fun to play with in fic. And because I'm shameless, he's where I did it once that I just thought was funny. And very Faith:

Faith: “Tell. There have to have been some juicy pickle-dillos in your past.”

Angel: “You mean ‘peccadilloes’?”

Faith: “Uh. Yeah. I mean pickles, Angel. Long, thick, juicy pickles.”


Also, I can't wait to have Angel call Buffy "coquette" in a sex scene and Buffy say, "what did you just call your cock now?" Though. Hmm. *scratches head* not sure it quite works because "coque" doesn't actually sound like cock. Huh. :o/

Just the other day I was working on a fic that included bondage - not the sexy kind, the trussed up and held captive variety - and kept looking for other ways to express it because of the kink overtones the word has in fandom. I think I eventually went with hog-tied...

Yeah, this is what I mean above...though I use the thesaurus all the time for even more subtle distinctions. Most of the time I can't articulate why I would choose one word in the thesaurus over another, but it always makes a big difference to me.

[identity profile] stultiloquentia.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 03:31 am (UTC)(link)
"Active vocab" generally refers to the words you use in speech and writing -- a subset of your total vocab, which is all the words you recognize or could define if pressed.

Nice way of putting it and yeah, the latter is totally my biggest problem in writing, as you've alluded to in a comment or two on some of my fic.

Ah, but your prose is crazy for interesting and well-considered reasons, not to try and impress people with your thesaurus-wrangling. I don't think your control is perfect (jeepers, neither is mine, and I haven't attempted a fraction of the rodeo acts you have), but I think it's pretty special. You're going places.

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[identity profile] crazydiamondsue.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 03:33 am (UTC)(link)
Though. Hmm. *scratches head* not sure it quite works because "coque" doesn't actually sound like cock. It does if you say it right...peccadilloes!
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 04:31 am (UTC)(link)
On that last thing, for me there's an awful lot of arguable stuff - maybe I'll mail you when I've got my head round it, eh?

Oh yes, discussion with you is vastly enjoyable!

like its footprint, if you like.

Oh, I do like! That's a fabulous way of putting it, because a lot of the time that's what I have when I go bop to the thesaurus for the actual word I'm looking for.

It's got to be the right type of thesaurus as well. Not a concise one, and not one that's the size of a concrete block either - I get lost in the lists with those. My favorite at the moment is the new Penguin - ah, I see it calls itself concise - it's what I call a medium-sized thesaurus.

I have lots of thesauruses (thesauri?), but I really only use thesaurus.com. I have a really old Roget's that's conceptually organized instead of alphabetically, which can be helpful when I can't even think of a word to look up, or ... for other reasons I can't articulate right now. I understand about not using online thesauruses. Have you seen this?--I can see both how it'd be even more uncomfortable to use than thesaurus.com...but also how it might be closer to having a book at your finger-tips.

Sounds like I don't choose them critically, doesn't it? I

Doesn't sound that way to me at all. The rhythm and shape of a word is very very important to a sentence, to a paragraph, to a piece on the whole--and it's not something too many people seem to think about.

If you're orating, you stimulate a response from the audience by the sound and the swell of your words. [...] It's like the rhythm and pacing of the words give the reader hints of what their response should be.

I didn't know that about orating and omg, I LOVE how you put that, about how the ryhthm/pacing gives the reader the hints for the response. I think that's really true.

I hadn't thought about this at all, so what I've just written is new to me! Damn, but you ask good questions.

Ha, I'm glad you feel that way!

Oh, and in revising, I'll work towards clarity, and I don't always allow myself to be as playful as I'd like. Although I kind of got sanction to be playful from a writing workshop I was on recently.

I think it's only in the last year or so that I really started playing around with writing, although I've been writing--seriously writing--since the 6th grade, really. I guess there *might*'ve been a time when I was all about playing with style, but it all got knocked out of me when a. I went to college, and b. I realized a lot of the things I'd written didn't make any sense, they were so drowned in "style." Anyway, I've been writing fanfiction for years, but it wasn't until I found Jossverse and some of the great writers here (and kinda simultaneously, read a couple novels that dabbled in this sort of thing) that I realized you *can* be experimental and *can* play with all the crazy things words can do and *can* use so many of the crazy connections and ideas that I see when I read and write, but don't know how to pull off.

I still can't quite pull off everything I try, but lord is it fun to endeavor.

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