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It's Lion Turtles all the way down ([personal profile] lettered) wrote2006-04-06 12:31 pm

Let's talk about word choice.

Once upon a time there was a wank on it, but for the life of me I can't remember what the life threatening issues were (it might've been something about tentacles and Hermione), or I'd link it for your snorting things up your nose pleasure (within was the link to THE most HI-larious bad!fic I have EVER read). But wanks come around about every 7 months, 4 days, and 3.2 hours, so don't worry your noggins, kids; you'll be seeing it soon enough. Anyway, we are only concerned with the end result, which was really nothing like the following, but it's how most wanks end up looking to me, so here you go:

Person With Anime Name A: *mocks* The words you use are too big for your fics!
Person With Clever Apathetic Phrase For Name B: You just aren't smart enough to read me! [*is emo*]
FANDOM_WANK: Person With Anime Name A's wee!vocabulary! *mockety-mock*
FANDOM_WANK: Shitmanfuck, Person A's one of ours!
Person A: Yes, the words Person B uses sound too intellectual for the average intellect of her fic, mock her, mock her!
FANDOM_WANK: Wait, we're mocking people who use big words now?
FANDOM_WANK: OMG, WHAT ARE WE MOCKING? LET'S GET IT STRAIGHT, PEOPLE!
FANDOM_WANK: Or not. *mock mock mocking*, which occasionally ends in smocking, after which we all end up with cute little pinafores.

[Transcriber's Note: was that a place for emo? Did I get it right?]

So anyway the wank is not the point; the point isn't even those crazy kids at F_W, nor even their smocking needles.

The point is word choice. I felt like poking Person A with a firm needle of repartee (© Jane Eyre omg!), but I actually knew what Person A meant. Every once in a while I'll be reading a fic and I'll stumble onto a word--a word that isn't necessarily uncommon, but a word that makes me say, "Oh. I just know Author had her thesaurus out for this one," and not in a "what a way to flex your vocab" way, but in a "that was completely unnecessary; she should've used a simpler word" way. That is, the word, which wouldn't've caused me to bat an eyelash in a more sophisticated piece, draws attention like a sore thumb because the rest of the piece (conceptually, structurally, grammatically, whatever) doesn't quite...live up to the occasional bursts of elevated vocabulary.

I think it happens a lot with new writers and especially young writers and also bad writers. Some people with a smaller vocabulary might be deciding to spice up their piece with a couple of words they either a) don't know, b) understand but aren't familiar with how to use, c) rarely hear or see. The result might be a relatively even tone, voice, style of the piece, until you get to those particular words. Again, they might not be particularly complex or unusual words, just words that stand out as a little more...advanced than the rest.

But I use the thesaurus ALL THE TIME, and not just when I can't think of a word...I use it when I want to find a word with a certain flavor, and sometimes the word I choose is also "more advanced" than the word I would've chosen on my own. Also, I freely admit that I am one of those writers who has a small vocabulary and tries to spice up her writing with a thesaurus and words I might not normally use in ordinary conversation. In one fic I actually used words that I did not know (something I'd never done before. I looked them up in the dictionary and then googled around to see how they were used in various sentences before I used them, but before that, I had had no clue what the words meant).

The thing is, I think it's possible to use a word you didn't know before, or hadn't used before, or have rarely see, and not have it feel out of place, not have it break the style, tone, voice etc. What I really want to ask is, "how does one achieve this?" But I really already have my answer: I read and weigh and experiment and pick the word that feels right to me. Sometimes it's the common word I came up with right off the bat; sometimes it's the word in the thesaurus I might know but wouldn't have lighted on in weeks of thinking, sometimes it's even a word I'm a little uncertain of and have to go double-check the meaning of before I use it (and that one time, it was words I didn't know at all!)

But what I'm interested in is the attitudes towards this. Do you use a thesaurus, how much, do you like using it, does it feel like cheating, do you only use it because you can't *think* of a word, or do you use it because you have a word you could use but it just doesn't have the right flavor? Do you ever hold off on using the thesaurus because you feel it might stilt your speech? Do you use a thesaurus on purpose to stilt your speech? Do you use words you're uncertain of, or don't know? Do you ever pull back from using a word because you feel it's something whoever's reading might not know, even though it's a word is something you feel like you might use in everyday conversation? Have you ever had it happen that someone says, "Whoa, showing off your vocab!" when you used a word you thought was pretty common? Do you ever use a word *expecting* that most won't know what it means?

(When you read fanfic, do you ever come across words you don't know? Do you ever go look them up afterwards?)

All the above was just supposed to be one point under the general idea of "word choice," but I had difficulty expressing myself, sorry. I wish someone very clever would come in after me and boil these big posts down to three neat little four-lined paragraphs, because I'm way too lazy to do it.)

One of the questions I have relates to my last question about research: what about word research? How often do you research just looking for a specific word? I mentioned my plate episode, when I wanted to find another word for "ceramic" to reference what the plate is made of. Do people often go hunting for such specific words? And if you were going to write a fic with say, a big medical problem in it, is learning lots of vocabulary along the way something you do? And would you use the words you learned in the fic, even if most people wouldn't know their meanings?

Also, how concerned are you with word choice? Do you just write whatever comes out of you; do you do that but then go back to replace some words with better words, do you end "settling" when you can't find the exact word you want, how long do you hunt for the proper words?

I'm just interested in how writers approach the words they use. Which when you think about it, is really the most basic thing to writing there is, which is maybe why I have so many questions but am finding it difficult to state my point succinctly. I'd love to hear anyone's and everyone's thoughts on it.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 04:46 am (UTC)(link)
Your posts bring me joy, Joy!

Heh. It's good when I live up to my name! Then I don't get that question, "WHY AREN'T YOU BEING JOYFUL?" Which is clever enough for some people but TERRIBLY AGGRAVATING when I am depressed!

Using a bound thesaurus helps focus my thoughts,

This is interesting! I almost always need a thesuaurs to be as immediate as possible, or else I lose the flow of what I'm writing.

Yes, the word has to have the right flavor -- and weight. Can't throw the sentence off balance. It also has to have the right cadence when I hear it in my mind.

You know, most people are mentioning rhythm, and it's something very important to me as a writer. I read most pieces I write out loud. I wish I knew how this works, why some things sound *right* and others do not.

I'll pick up books of poetry while I'm writing just to feel certain patterns and words, rediscover usage. ...

That actually happens with 99% of the reasearch I do for a fic. Get as thoroughly inculcated in the subject as I can, given the limits of my intellect and the timeframe, and then leave most of that off the page. I think that's probably very common -- again, old school habits.


I don't know if you saw; I did a post [Bad username or site: http://tkp.livejournal.com/22387.html @ livejournal.com]here talking about exactly this. Anyway, I think it's interesting that some people read poetry to inspire prose...I should try it sometime. Then again poetry just makes me sad because I can't do it. I've never read anything prose where I came away feeling, "I could never get anywhere close" but all the poetry I love is like that for me. I have a T S Eliot complex. I'm rambling.

And I am a huge fan of using new-to-you words in fic! Yes!!

Oh really! The one time I did it in a fic I was most trepidacious. Heh. Trepidacious, I had to look that up.

Alas, she could find my g-spot, but that dis put out the fire for me.

Compliments. Check. G-spot finding. Check. Dude, you are so picky! :o) :o)

I love your posts like whoa.

I'm glad!
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 04:47 am (UTC)(link)
gah! Wrong code. The link is here.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 04:59 am (UTC)(link)
OMG YOU USED THE © SIGN *squee* & -is proud- lmao o.O

Ha! I tried to think of something so I could use it. When I asked about it before I had tried on my comp but it wasn't showing up! So I figured I didn't know what it was. Then I figured out you had to use the numbers on the number pad. I'm such a complete ditz sometimes.

I'm very guilty for using words I do not know

I hardly ever do it because it's so easy to...not really misuse a word; if I look up the definition I'll probably get the meaning it right, but it's so easy for it to *sound* awkward because it's not the word I'd *normally* use, you know?

I've taken a break from writing fics etc. because of my total lack of knowledge as far as that goes so I can read up on it. I've bought like fifty books on essays and I've been hanging around some of the more experienced fandom writers on LJ and reading their essays, including this one!

Well, I'm so glad if posts like these can help you think of ways to be a better writer! But really, actually, I think the best way to learn is to read the kinds of things you want to write, and to write as often as you can. I've learned so many things through just writing. I know everyone says that, but I really think it's true!

I'm guessing the next time I try to write I'll probably be re-reading to see if the word fits

Rereading to make sure the words fit together and "sound" good is something I always do. Sometimes I read the whole thing out loud...if a piece flows well out loud, it generally flows easily through a reader's mind. Which is important, you don't want a reader stumbling and having to solve what you've written as if it's some kind of math equation...though I freely admit that quite a few things I've written read some jumbled up-ly that reading it's like working out a particularly difficult algebra problem.

Really, who wants to read the word 'hebetudinous' in a story where the majority of the words have under 12 letters in them? Certainly not me, I tell you.

Heh, yes, that's exactly what I mean! But then again, the neat thing about being very careful about word choice...if the majority of the story is full of words under 12 letters, the word "hebetudinous" (had to look that up) calls special attention to itself...most of the time, you don't want one word in particular to be given special attention, but sometimes, for very specific reasons, you do, and knowing how all your words fit together and flow is very important to both maintaining that flow and jerking the reader out of it. If that makes any sense.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 05:14 am (UTC)(link)
stopping to look something up would break the flow of my writing and I'm much less likely to brain freeze on a fic, because I am lazy enough that I only write when I am in the zone

That's really interesting to me, because I actually seem to brain freeze *more* when I'm "in the zone." I mean, when I'm forcing everything out, or just kinda writing off-hand (I have no idea what that means but it sounded good) the words I'm thinking of flow pretty easily. A lot of times they're boring words with a lot of suck, but they come to me. When I'm really, really in a groove all the sudden the text is streaming out like my fingers are ...well, grooving down some sort of path, but the bottom keeps dropping out, possibly because the world hates me, AtS got cancelled, and Chili's stopped serving that apple thing for dessert. Whatever the reason, I end up putting asterisks where the words should be, because if I stop my fingers will lose the beat and take a wrong turn.

I have a naturally large vocabulary.

As someone with a kinda small vocabulary, I wonder how that works. I mean, I feel like I'm pretty smart, like I should know a lot of words. And yet I just don't and so often forget the ones I do know. I wonder if it's a memory thing? Anywho, it would suck to have to hold back like that.

Although, what you say about POV limited to the character is another thing again--if you're writing a really close limited third the word choice is a whole lot less about relating to your audience than it is about characterization. Even stuff like your rhythm, etc falls under the auspices of characterization. When I write limited third, I tend to zero in really close to the character and then pan back out, almost to omnicient, so the "voice" of the narrator sometimes slips into free and indirect discourse of the character, but is sometimes more (or, feasibly, less) advanced than the character I'm writing.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-08 05:20 am (UTC)(link)
When I think to myself, "Jesus Christ, woman, if you use 'snarled' one more time in this story, readerdom at large will rise up and strangle you with your own large intestine. Synonyms, bitch!"

Hahahahaha! I know that exact feeling; [livejournal.com profile] stultiloquentia mentioned that phenomenon above. I wonder why it is that we sometimes get stuck on a word...and it won't even be a word that's particularly applicable to a whole lot of things, but suddenly you want to use it every time you could. Drives me buggy. And I hate seeing it in published work.

On such occasions I'll often set the piece aside and come back later with a fresh brain.

I do that too. It's amazing how if you're not thinking about it, words can just sort of pop! into existence in your brain, and you're, I don't know, washing your sheets, and all the sudden you have that missing word for your story.

I tend to be more concerned with it on the level of sentence and paragraph than individual words--I mean, I want to get the exact right word, but I'm more concerned with getting the exact right sentence, if that makes any sense.

Perfect sense. As you say, part of it is about rhythm. And of course, the individual words themselves aren't what's important...and you never, or rarely, want the reader to say, "hey, that was a great word you used!"...you want them to say "hey, that was a great story!", and for that, the words have to fit with the sentences have to fit with the paragraphs have to fit with the story.
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[personal profile] indri 2006-04-08 09:30 am (UTC)(link)
The word "terpsichorean" is used in Practical Cats: "Reserving our terpsichorean powers/ To dance to the light of the Jellicle moon." It's sung in the Lloyd Webber musical too.

And anyone familiar with the Muses would know the word, of course.

[identity profile] kita0610.livejournal.com 2006-04-09 06:06 am (UTC)(link)
I tend to write in a style that's almost best read aloud in terms of rhythm and flow. So word choice is very important to me. I don't use a thesaurus for intital word choices, but when I read over a bit of a fic, if the meter doeesn't sound right to me, I might hit the synonym button and see if something else sounds better.

I love your posts.

[identity profile] stultiloquentia.livejournal.com 2006-04-09 06:07 am (UTC)(link)
That's the one! And now I know why my second guess was Lear, too. *g*
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[identity profile] kyuuketsukirui.livejournal.com 2006-04-09 07:26 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, I have a large vocabulary in that I rarely come across a word I don't know the meaning of/haven't seen before, but in terms of words I actually use on a daily basis, both for myself and in my writing, it's much smaller.
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[personal profile] ilyena_sylph 2006-04-09 07:28 am (UTC)(link)
*meanders in from metafandom* Hi. How are you? I'd like to take a crack at this, despite the fact that you don't know me from Eve.

I haven't posted much at all of what I've written, but I think I can count on the fingers of one hand the number of times I've deliberately gone to a thesaurus for a different word, as opposed to going "crud, what is that word that kind of means xxxx...." and dragging a thesaurus out for the assistance. I've had teachers ask me if I did, though, and not believe me when I told them no, that was my actual vocabulary... I suppose that could mean I have a rather large vocabulary... *shrugs* I don't think I've ever deliberately used a word for spicing purposes.

I don't like using a thesaurus, as a general rule, but if I feel it's necessary to get to where I want to be I'll do it... but I'm lucky enough that I haven't had to often. I don't worry about it stilting my speech, because if it doesn't work, I won't use it, no matter why I went looking for it, and no I won't refuse to use a word that came to me because someone might not get it. That's what a dictionary's for, if they want to know.

I won't use a word I'm not sure about, because that feels... hollow. I don't think I expect people not to know things, but then I am frequently reminded by friends of mine that I expect far too much in the area of knowledge from the general populace.

Yes, I have people look at me strangely for my vocabulary at least once or twice a month--and these are university upperclassmen!

(Absolutely I go look up anything I don't know, fanfic or pro work. No, not afterwards, right-the-hell then, because it will aggravate the hell out of me otherwise.)

Oh. Word research. That's a whole other topic... yes, if I think it's necessary I will go do word research, extensively if I have to. Yes, if I was going to write medical things, I would write in medicalese when a doctor or nurse was thinking/speaking/acting, because that's how it would be done. Another, lay character would then become confused at what was being said and it would be translated for them (that's when I call my mother and make her drag out the hospital "layperson speech guide" [yes, a manual on how doctors should talk to normal people does exist] for me). Actually, I'll do that with any professional field I attempt to write. Every section of the population has jargon, and if you don't use it correctly, the character that is part of that section won't feel natural to the reader. (Obviously, unless you're writing for ER, Scrubs, or other doctor shows, we're not talking about the principal characters here, but supporting ones there for a purpose).

Normally I go with what comes out, because I very rarely can find a better way to put it. It may have taken me some time to get there the first time, but it's generally right when it comes out.

I have kind of an opposite problem to the one you're talking about... one of my most commonly written characters is a teenaged male of sometimes questionable maturity with something of a distaste for education. He doesn't say things the way I would, and I have to rigorously edit what I write from his point of view to make certain he sounds like himself and not like me. No big-syllable words unless there's no way around it, no real lengthy exposition.... and I have to remind myself that 'no, he wouldn't know that, or get that, go be confused there!' about something that his best-friend boy genius character has just said or done. That's a fun little struggle.

There's my.... well, several cents on the matter. Questions, commentary, think I'm an idiot?

Here via metafandom...

[identity profile] gwynfyd.livejournal.com 2006-04-09 07:51 am (UTC)(link)
"Also, how concerned are you with word choice? Do you just write whatever comes out of you; do you do that but then go back to replace some words with better words, do you end "settling" when you can't find the exact word you want, how long do you hunt for the proper words?"

I do all these things. It depends. Sometimes I hunt for the right word, tearing my hair out the whole time. Other times, I just settle for the closest word to what I want, and maybe I'll go back and fix it. Sometimes I wake up in the middle of the night, knowing the right word to use. But I don't kill myself finding the perfect word. In a long story, one word usually gets lost in the shuffle.

I care more about the story, in the macro, rather than the words I use to tell the story, in the micro.
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[personal profile] starwatcher 2006-04-09 03:31 pm (UTC)(link)
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Words are so interesting. During my school years, I had three years of Latin, four of French, and two of Spanish. I can't speak any of them, but it made me more aware of my own language.

In answer to your question - I usually use a thesaurus because you have a word you could use but it just doesn't have the right flavor. That sums it up nicely. Since I'm always working in Word, I'll type the 'almost-right' word, then use the internal MS Word thesaurus to see if I can identify the exact word I'm looking for. If not, I'll check thesaurus.com when I get back online. And ultimately, if I can't find the exact derivation I want, I may end up just settling for the 'almost-right' word, if it conveys my meaning 'well enough'.

I won't use words I didn't know before seeing them in the thesaurus; it acts more as a memory boost. We all have so many words in our brain that it can sometimes be difficult to dig up the exact word we want, without the reminder of the thesaurus. But, if I recognize them, I expect my readers to do so as well; I've never held back from using a word because I thought it was too high-falutin'. (And if they don't, I expect that they can understand the meaning through context.) On the other hand, I write simple "friendship" stories without a lot of depth; the issue of 'big' or 'fancy' words rarely comes up. *g*

How often do you research just looking for a specific word?

Very seldom. I've done it occasionally, when there seems to be only one general-use word for the item or idea. If that means I have to use the same word four times in one paragraph, I'll go searching for alternatives.

Have you ever had it happen that someone says, "Whoa, showing off your vocab!" when you used a word you thought was pretty common?

Just once. A commenter thought that the character wouldn't use the phrase "harbinger of Spring" in a letter (despite the fact that it's a well-known phrase!). *g* Different takes on the character; I know the man is educated, and I believe that it's human tendency to write a bit more 'upscale' than we speak, so it worked for me. I'll shrug off the occasional remark as, we all have different expectations in our characters. If several people noted word choice in many of my stories, I might re-think my vocabular habits. Otherwise, it's a "you can't please all of the people all of the time" situation.

Also, how concerned are you with word choice?

Very. I've sometimes spent five or ten minutes searching my brain / using Word's thesaurus / using thesaurus.com to find the exact word that I want, to convey the precise meaning that I intend. But when proofing my work, I may decide on a different word (sometimes simpler) to better fit the 'flow' of the passage. But, when all else fails, I will 'settle' for the 'adequate' word; if the story keeps moving along, the occasional 'not-quite-but-almost-right' word will not jar the reader.

pick the word that feels right to me.

And that's what it all comes down to. However we find that word, we want to use it to enhance our story. I don't think any method is 'wrong' if we keep that goal in mind.
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[identity profile] violaclaire.livejournal.com 2006-04-09 07:08 pm (UTC)(link)
I . . . don't own a thesauraus. My mother-the-composition-rhetoric-scholar refuses to have them in the house; she thinks it's too easy to use them as crutches. Honestly, the only times I care are when I have to come up with antonyms for vocabulary lists.

I tend to write by pouring everything out, and then going back to revise. I don't stop to look for a word, but I'll sometimes put down a place-holder and come back to it later.

I never look up words when I'm reading for fun. If I see them enough, I'll learn what they mean by osmosis. That said, I *heart* the OED. I mostly use it to check for earliest usage when I'm writing a period piece, but I swear you could find anything you would ever want to know about the English language in it.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 03:53 am (UTC)(link)
It's the thesaurus abuse

That's exactly it with me, too. Some people say you can over-use a thesaurus. Well, I personally sometimes use a thesaurus on every other word!--so it might just be me being defensive, but I tend to think the problem is not over using it, just using it wrong.

I think my big problem with theasaurus use is akin to the problem with spell-check--people tend to get lazy with and because of it.

Yeah. And to me, if I'm really that unsure of what a word means, it requires more than just looking it up in a dictionary. There are certain ways most words are used, and a certain way a lot of phrases are put together... such that even if the word you're using is *technically* correct, it still may come out sounding awkward. Sometimes that can create a really great effect--one book I ready managed to use so many big and not-what-you-would-think-fits-there words that almost every word really jumped off the page and felt new. But my suspicion is the writer in question knew not only the meaning of all those words but precisely how they were generally used--because only then can you really began to twist them, I think.

I sometimes have whole passages just appear in my mind out of nowhere, but once they're written, stringing them together and finding the right words that still suit the mood/tone/etc. can be like pulling teeth

It's so funny how that works. I write in bursts. A paragraph or so will come to me, and then I have to sit there. Sometimes I go elsewhere. Sometimes I pace. Sometimes I take a bath. Then I can come back and write another burst. Just out of curiousity, do you write all those passages first and then go string them together later--i.e., write non-linearly?

I have gotten the "Whoa! Holy GRE words!" comments in conversation before over words that I didn't think were any big deal, and it kind of weirded me out, to be honest.

That happens to me in conversation too. Also over IM. Which is yeah, kinda weird, because I really do have a somewhat limited vocab for someone of my education and abilities. What's more disconcerting is learning that someone didn't know what the words you were using meant and they didn't tell you. I find it frustrating, because why would I be talking if I didn't want anyone to understand me?

And aww. I hope your achy-super-tense-neck-migrainey thing went away! *digitally rubs your shoulders*

I should get a badge. Am now proud and confident user of the term "emo."
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 03:56 am (UTC)(link)
My mom used to smock! She made me the prettiest dresses ever. And these pink courderoy overalls with Easter bunnies on the front part.

Dude, it's not senility! I've been doing that since forever! And I had to use the thesaurus to write this post (couldn't think of another word for "sophisticated"). What's sad is when I can't even think of a word close to the meaning I'm looking for to look up in the thesaurus!
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 04:02 am (UTC)(link)
but on the other hand I do sometimes get too attached to needlessly heavy words.

Although I know my writing tends to be way too dense for my own good, and that my phrasing is often needlessly convoluted, I don't think I run into this problem with specific words very much. Sometimes, though, I consciously *choose* to choose the heftier word just because I feel like it would be more suited to that convoluted phrasing and dense style ... which just leads to further hazing up my point. I need to learn a balance, somewhere!

what I *think* it means. In that case, I look it up, and I might think twice about using it if I myself wasn't sure what it meant.

This happens to me fairly often. The words people around me use are really a limited range, so I've learned most my words from books. I tend to be very very slow, though, at getting meanings to stick in my head; it's not until I've figured out the word from context a couple dozen times that I actually even think about using it. What's embarrassing is when I go to use it and find out it doesn't mean what I think it means... or means exactly th opposite.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 04:19 am (UTC)(link)
Which is difficult, because normally when I'm struggling for the word I'm looking for, I can't even think of synonyms.

This happens to me A LOT! I'm glad I'm not the only one. I have a thesaurus that's organized by concept, as opposed to alphabetic, so when I'm really stuck, I can look up a word that's only reeeeeally tangentially related and get there pretty quickly.

ometimes it's the simpler word that I blank on and the more advanced vocabulary that pops into my head, and on those occasions I'll usually be the one to think "that word sounds too formal in that context" and have to use the thesaurus to remind myself of a word that would sound more natural.

This happens to me sometimes. I wish it happened more often. It'd be nice to have the bigger words at my finger-tips so I'd at least have a choice of them. Instead I seem pretty adept at cutting straight to the chase.

Though I'm rather proud that "adept" came to me so easily while writing the above sentence.

rather than dwelling or complaining about it.

I don't think I've ever had it bother me to the point where it'd truly *bother* me or make me stop reading--though it's something I'd definitely point out if beta'ing. But when it happens a lot it's sure to lesser my opinion of the quality of the story as a whole.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 04:50 am (UTC)(link)
I don't like the way the word sounds, so I'll look up a synonym that's softer/harder/more lyrical/more gutteral/starts with the letter "s." Rhythm is very important to me, so the way a word sounds makes a big difference.

A lot of people have mentioned they use a thesaurus to find the word with the correct rhythm. Rhythm is very important to me also, but I know so little about how it works. I hear it; I'm just not sure why some things sound better than others. That's my next question, I guess!

Thanks for linking to that discussion! I should really read 3D. I wasn't thinking about word choice as it related to the 'verse or characterization, more as it relates to the rest of the piece itself and also to the audience. That's partly because if you're writing a character in "voice"--say, if it's in first person or a very close limited third--then word choice isn't going to be about "does this fit?" so much as about "would character X say this?"--which is a lot more about characterization than the other things I brought up in this post.

With a more distant third, or maybe if you can get away with it, a second person, word choice (and rhythm, and everything else that's not dialgue) become a bit more about the narrator, or the author (usually both) than they are in close third or first. And so I think it's possible to do something like say, make *very* introspective observations about Buffy, without having Buffy (not given overly much to introspection) make them. The key is to have a narrative distance--which I know I've fucked up in several fics, by either saying blatantly, "Buffy thought," or having Buffy react to thoughts I do not think she'd really think, or slipping into a tone that sounds like a much closer limited third than it really is.

But even then, now matter how much distance you put in it, there can be words, language, images, thoughts, that simply don't fit in the world of the characters--then it's not so much a matter of characterization as simply mood. [livejournal.com profile] entrenous88 said something to that effect in reponse to that NFA 5 Things piece I did that really resonated with me. She said the actions of the characters seemed appropriate but at times she didn't feel like the characters she knew would "inhabit" (such a great word choice!) some of the words and images. While I had realized some of the characters might not think the things I had them thinking or, more often, floating about their heads without them really thinking them, I hadn't considered how just having those observations *there*, combined with the words and images that helped illustrate them, might still affect characterization (insofar as the moods and tones with which we normally see these characters dealt).

Uh, I hope that makes sense.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 05:00 am (UTC)(link)
I sometimes use a thesaurus while writing for the same reason you sometimes use it while editing, for the rhythm. The thing for me is that if the rhythm is wrong with a particular word, that throws the rest of the phrase/sentence/paragraph off, so if I go back and decide on another word for one part, everything else has to change as well. Though sometimes I've been on crack while writing and realize one rereading that the rhythm is indeed off somehow and needs a new word to *fix* it instead of to ruin all my slave-labor. Hmph.

I love your posts.

I'm glad!
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 05:15 am (UTC)(link)
*meanders in from metafandom* Hi. How are you? I'd like to take a crack at this, despite the fact that you don't know me from Eve.

Welcome, I'm well, I'm glad you did, and at least I know you're not Eve!

I've had teachers ask me if I did, though, and not believe me when I told them no, that was my actual vocabulary

That happened to me in high school once. I asked if I could have a thesaurus for an essay test; he said yes; I ended up not using it; he refused to believe I didn't get half the words from the thesaurus. This is possibly because I wrote an essay on the Industrial Revolution as a bodice ripper, complete with *very* purple prose (I was bored!)

I don't worry about it stilting my speech, because if it doesn't work, I won't use it, no matter why I went looking for it,

I do worry about that sometimes, because every once in a while it's hard for me to tell if the word works or if it didn't mesh. Usually I'm pretty good at hearing what I write...but there's that doubt there.

I won't use a word I'm not sure about, because that feels... hollow.

Almost like cheating? I feel that way whenever I do it. And yet, sometimes I feel like there's no other way to either a. get at what I mean, or b. suit the tone of what I'm writing. I tend to do a bit of research--both looking it up and googling for sentences using the word--when I use a word I'm not sure of, but still, it feels . . . yeah, kind of cheap somehow.

yes, a manual on how doctors should talk to normal people does exist

That's so cool!

Every section of the population has jargon, and if you don't use it correctly, the character that is part of that section won't feel natural to the reader.

I feel that way too. I tend to research both the professions of and the passions of the people I'm writing. Even if I never use the weirdly technical words I learn, knowing them kind of helps me . . . adjust my brain to how they think, where they're coming from.

one of my most commonly written characters is a teenaged male of sometimes questionable maturity with something of a distaste for education. He doesn't say things the way I would, and I have to rigorously edit what I write from his point of view to make certain he sounds like himself and not like me.

Several people have pointed out how word choice can be just as much about characterization, which I think is really true, depending on the POV you're writing. In first person and a close limited third, word choice isn't going to be about your vocabulary, or that of your audience, and making sure the vocabulary in your piece is uniform and suited to the over-all tone is more about characterization than things like your use of the thesaurus.

I had some of the same issues while writing Faith in the BtVS fandom. She has a limited education and occasionally uses bad grammar ... my difficulty though was making her too stupid. She's a smart gal, just not big with the book learnin' . . . which means not getting to use some words that might be more apt.

Questions, commentary, think I'm an idiot?

Of course not; thanks for dropping by!
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 05:21 am (UTC)(link)
I do find that the longer the story, the less I care about each word. Since I'm generally a *very* long fic writer, short fics can be agonizing because I feel like every word has to equate to the 10 (or 10,000) words I would normally use . . . so each choice is very important. But in a longer piece I figure that if the word isn't exactly precise, the meaning will eventually come clear through further events, etc.

I have the same kind of issues when it comes to style; my short pieces tend to be very stylized, while the style of my shorter pieces fade into the background as much as possible in order for the story to come forward. I guess it's just because the "micro" is so much more noticeable in a short fic.

Anyway, I'm rambling! Thanks for your thoughts.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 05:31 am (UTC)(link)
During my school years, I had three years of Latin, four of French, and two of Spanish. I can't speak any of them

Heh. Boy do I know that feeling.

Since I'm always working in Word, I'll type the 'almost-right' word, then use the internal MS Word thesaurus to see if I can identify the exact word I'm looking for.

I feel like a prize idiot, because I didn't even know Word *had* a thesaurus. Sometimes I type in the almost-right word and put an asterisk afterwards, so I know to go back and find the right one.

I believe that it's human tendency to write a bit more 'upscale' than we speak, so it worked for me.

Oh yeah, and that presents all sorts of difficulties for getting the "right" characterization. Even if your canon is book-based, you so often see the characters *speak* as opposed to *write*, and I definitely agree that everyone I've ever encountered has different writing habits than they do speech habits.

But, when all else fails, I will 'settle' for the 'adequate' word;

It really depends on the piece, but I've done this fairly often. It drives me buggy. Whenever I reread I note the word and lament I didn't find the better word I knew there was! But sometimes there's just a mental block, the way there is sometimes when I write a first draft meaning to rewrite it and simply can't find new ways to rephrase certain parts.

I don't think any method is 'wrong' if we keep that goal in mind.

Oh, definitely!

Thanks for your thoughts!
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 05:36 am (UTC)(link)
You make me sad. Not to own a thesaurus is like not to have . . . a thesaurus-y thing!

but I'll sometimes put down a place-holder and come back to it later.

I do this quite often. Sometimes it's something with the right sound but not the right meaning, or vice versa; sometimes it's just an asterisk.

I never look up words when I'm reading for fun. If I see them enough, I'll learn what they mean by osmosis.

What worries me when I see words I don't know is what if I DON'T see that word again, or not for a while--then I'll have missed the opportunity! Seriously, I'm kind of scary about this sometimes. Some books I don't carry with me without also bringing a dictionary. Usually I just bring a pen and write down all the words on a bookmark or the back cover.

hat said, I *heart* the OED. I mostly use it to check for earliest usage when I'm writing a period piece, but I swear you could find anything you would ever want to know about the English language in it.

I love the OED too! I really want one. The first time I used it was my fish course of college, in which we were supposed to do really close word-by-word analysis of Canterbury Tales. Essentially, you couldn't do it without the OED; you had to talk about not only what each word meant, and could've meant then, but how the origin and development of the word's meaning could affect the meaning of the text as well. I'm going to sound like a dork, but lord, it was sooooo fun.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 05:43 am (UTC)(link)
"Active vocab" generally refers to the words you use in speech and writing -- a subset of your total vocab, which is all the words you recognize or could define if pressed.

Yup, that's what I'd assumed.

Ah, but your prose is crazy for interesting and well-considered reasons, not to try and impress people with your thesaurus-wrangling. I don't think your control is perfect (jeepers, neither is mine, and I haven't attempted a fraction of the rodeo acts you have), but I think it's pretty special. You're going places.

Thank you! Well, I'm starting to believe that anything in text is possible if there is enough reason behind it. But it's very easy to get distracted by pretty fireworks and tricks until the purpose behind them goes to pot. The end result is disinterested (or sometimes singed!) spectators. Everything in its course, I guess.
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[identity profile] tkp.livejournal.com 2006-04-10 05:51 am (UTC)(link)
I know there's this whole derisive field of criticism against adverbs (and adjectives!) as if the whole world can be boiled down to nouns and verbs. What-*ev*-er. These are clearly the same people who subsist on celery and wheat germ.

Far be it from me to dispute [livejournal.com profile] eliade when it comes to writing!

Certainly, there are some who say the less adjectives and adverbs the better. I agree, they're full of shit. However, I think the general...uh, prejudice? (should turn to the thesaurus now but WHATEVER) against them has arisen from the tendency of young/new/bad writers to use five adjectives when one more-to-the-point one would've sufficed, or to use an adverb when a sharper, stronger, more active verb would've been enough.

In The Idiot, Dostoevsky uses adverbs a lot to describe how the main character says or acts, and it often comes at the end of the sentences (which is possibly my translation). Still, the result is one of surprise; the character makes a remark that you read as sarcasm, but it turns out he has said it sincerely--the character is continually turning the dime on expectation this way.

An example, anyway, of how important something like an adverb can be . . . it would just be difficult to pull that kind of thing off in such a regular way, the way Dostoevsky did in that novel. I've tried it myself and the reaction with most people I showed the piece to was . . . "why were the adverbs so funky?" Ha!

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